Short story competition.

[raider00321]

o ok

haha chillax, im only locking topics that have gone waaay of topic or werent meant for full blown convo's lol. Also, onnce the topics been locked, plz dont continue it on. As moderators, we need to set at least slightly decent example to the other users :p. Thus why im locking the things that are finished and gone off topic etc etc etc

[SuperMario19]

o ok

haha chillax, im only locking topics that have gone waaay of topic or werent meant for full blown convo's lol. Also, onnce the topics been locked, plz dont continue it on. As moderators, we need to set at least slightly decent example to the other users :p. Thus why im locking the things that are finished and gone off topic etc etc etc

well ok mister president

[Geco-deco12]

o ok

haha chillax, im only locking topics that have gone waaay of topic or werent meant for full blown convo's lol. Also, onnce the topics been locked, plz dont continue it on. As moderators, we need to set at least slightly decent example to the other users :p. Thus why im locking the things that are finished and gone off topic etc etc etc

New nickname... locker 

[SuperMario19]

Hey this sounds like a locker lol

[Geco-deco12]

Hey this sounds like a locker lol

Back to short storys then! Any short storys? And at all? So far we have a total of 1... and 3 words 

[SuperMario19]

There was a kid who joined a forum.He was always active but he wasn't happy just as a member.He began to write more post and with the hope he can make him as the perfect mod that can offer everything.In some time there was a war between two crews Point Seclusion and Kitty Krew(three if we can call the FF a crew).The kid called for help from the administrator and there was a ghecko master that called for help too.Because if them the forum and the crew was saved from a really bloody battle.The ghecko master was chosen for one of the moderators in the site,but the kid wasn't sad he was happy for him.Because he was happy he was granted with power from the ghecko.Now he is known as DM-bot the powerful doorman who welcomes you in the forum.                                                                                 
                                                        be happy or you can't control your power
 this story wasn't 100% true the only true part was after the bloody batle

[Geco-deco12]

There was a kid who joined a forum.He was always active but he wasn't happy just as a member.He began to write more post and with the hope he can make him as the perfect mod that can offer everything.In some time there was a war between two crews Point Seclusion and Kitty Krew(three if we can call the FF a crew).The kid called for help from the administrator and there was a ghecko master that called for help too.Because if them the forum and the crew was saved from a really bloody battle.The ghecko master was chosen for one of the moderators in the site,but the kid wasn't sad he was happy for him.Because he was happy he was granted with power from the ghecko.Now he is known as DM-bot the powerful doorman who welcomes you in the forum.                                                                                 
                                                        be happy or you can't control your power
 this story wasn't 100% true the only true part was after the bloody batle

You beat raider! And i'm sure you will be a full mod soon. When that happens i will need a new nickname... GDM bot? (global DoorMan bot?)

[SuperMario19]

lol i like this new nick name but first i need to be a global

[Lakewonder]

The Hero Of Darkness.... By: Lakewonder

    He Awakes with a rush of air Flowing through the crevices of  his face. He is astonished to see three men standing over him. The last thing he can remember is being shot in the back of the head and supposedly dying. "But.. but i thought i was dead?" he said with a curious yet scared tone. He got up on his feet and looked around, he was in a plane suspended at least a good 5,000 feet in the air. " what are we doing up here?... How did we get up here... How long have i been out..?"

  " You Ask too many questions.." Said The third mysterious man while deleivering a side full house kick to his right temple knocking him out. he limp body fell to the ground with almost no warning.

" What The hell man!!??!!" Said the second man slapping the third upside his head. " we were supposed to look after him till his time.."

          "Whatever we'll just wiat another couple of hours.. i could use the sleep, and we won't be there for another couple of hours" Said the First man who seemed to be in charge.

 "fine" said the third and second man almost in sync.

   The Mysterious Stranger Awakes three hours later to see the same thing unravel, three men standing over him with a dark gaze. "its your time kid"  said the first man.

 They Strapped a parachute to his back and pushed him out of the plane. A wild frenzy of thoughts rushed through his head. " Oh my god.. I have been put into some kind of secret agent life style.. im james bond or Triple X.. This is gonna be awesome... I mean i was just a basic Navy seal but no im gonna be a secret agent !!!" his thoughts lifted him in spirit as he glided through the air.

 He landed softly his parachute already deployed. no one was around. Then all of a sudden fire broke out among the hills. He realized he had been launched into a terrorist operation. He then ducked behind a obstacle as his training in the Navy Seals Had tought him. He heard terrorist translating things that one had said. until someone finally said it in american.. "Everyone pick up arms and fight!!".

 He sat there behind a big rock hoping they wouldn't fire any explosives and maybe they had forgotten he is there even though they randomly continued to fire. He then heard planes flying in. He was saved!

 The firing had stopped everyone looking up. He shot up and said "Amen I am Saved" "Kachink" a single sniper bullet fired. He must have thought a million thoughts before that bullet reached him. He thought to himself how they had thrown him in the operation. then he realized he was just simple bait.. a pawn of The american government he thought as the 77 caliber Armor Piercing Bullet Lodged Into His skull. The Hills Were Bombed with Blue Ferrets and spreading Missles. All Around The military base " Good jobs were heard".
But they had forgotten that one man.. minding his own buisness who was thrown into someone else's war his life sacrificed for someone elses cause them pinning his fate on a board. He Was Gone Forever.

R.i.p George Farlin

 

[Lakewonder]

Sorry For the Double Post But Some Of you might think my story is a real story.. i made it up. I have ideas in my head and i put two good ones together. The Government is evil and Dying For an unworthy cause. If you Like It please Tell me So. I am a free lance writer for money and i want to see what you guys have to think of my storys i have won a few competitions before in school but nothing serious.

[Ship]

Not a bad story. Although the beginning with the unconscious person kinda confused me.

But, I don't necessarily agree with the theme of the story, considering the fact that I am pro-war. (Yes I'm pro-war, bring on your hate comments). But, a story is a representation of your own thoughts, and I have to give credit where credit is due. I thought you did a nice job on the story.

[Lakewonder]

Not a bad story. Although the beginning with the unconscious person kinda confused me.

But, I don't necessarily agree with the theme of the story, considering the fact that I am pro-war. (Yes I'm pro-war, bring on your hate comments). But, a story is a representation of your own thoughts, and I have to give credit where credit is due. I thought you did a nice job on the story.

That Story Didn't Express My thoughts. One Of my teachers once told me That the story shouldn't express your thoughts but those of others. I never express my idea's well at least in writing i don't. Anyways Would it be ok if i made a thread for people to post their story ideas who just can't put it into the right words or something like that?

[raider00321]

Not a bad story. Although the beginning with the unconscious person kinda confused me.

But, I don't necessarily agree with the theme of the story, considering the fact that I am pro-war. (Yes I'm pro-war, bring on your hate comments). But, a story is a representation of your own thoughts, and I have to give credit where credit is due. I thought you did a nice job on the story.

That Story Didn't Express My thoughts. One Of my teachers once told me That the story shouldn't express your thoughts but those of others. I never express my idea's well at least in writing i don't. Anyways Would it be ok if i made a thread for people to post their story ideas who just can't put it into the right words or something like that?

if can be very hard to express others thoughts. If you can do it, congrats, but i think what your teacher says is crap lol. Some real great books have been written by authors by using their own personality within their books. Do you know why? because their personality and thoughts they know best. They know how they would react, they know what they would think etc, Giving the writer to add great detail and complexity in their writing if they wish.

[Lakewonder]

Not a bad story. Although the beginning with the unconscious person kinda confused me.

But, I don't necessarily agree with the theme of the story, considering the fact that I am pro-war. (Yes I'm pro-war, bring on your hate comments). But, a story is a representation of your own thoughts, and I have to give credit where credit is due. I thought you did a nice job on the story.

That Story Didn't Express My thoughts. One Of my teachers once told me That the story shouldn't express your thoughts but those of others. I never express my idea's well at least in writing i don't. Anyways Would it be ok if i made a thread for people to post their story ideas who just can't put it into the right words or something like that?

if can be very hard to express others thoughts. If you can do it, congrats, but i think what your teacher says is crap lol. Some real great books have been written by authors by using their own personality within their books. Do you know why? because their personality and thoughts they know best. They know how they would react, they know what they would think etc, Giving the writer to add great detail and complexity in their writing if they wish.

But Expressing Someone Else's Voice Is My Style Of Writing. The Only Other Time I Use my own opinion is in my poetry.

[Ship]

But why bother expressing someone else's views? Most people will think that since you are the author, these are your views. You may as well write down what you believe, so that people don't get confused.